tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post1148791019406627182..comments2024-03-20T07:22:57.464-04:00Comments on Cupid's Literary Connection: Bouncer Round 6 #28CUPIDhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/01726782711068858241noreply@blogger.comBlogger4125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-6756808294351477922013-02-18T15:37:09.832-05:002013-02-18T15:37:09.832-05:00I love Freddy already!
There's a lot going on...I love Freddy already!<br /><br />There's a lot going on in the query, and I got a bit sidetracked at first reading about Freddy's everyday life and almost missed the hook. You might be able to cut the query back a bit. But not too much because it has awesome voice!<br /><br />Carissa #24Carissahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10594436685900756259noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-7859785767817444132013-02-18T12:51:12.530-05:002013-02-18T12:51:12.530-05:00I loved your query! I especially loved the way you...I loved your query! I especially loved the way you described Josiah, he and Freddy both sound like great characters. And this sounds like a great story! I would totally keep reading!<br /><br />Best of luck!<br /><br />#40Stephanie Garberhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05418429225626297957noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-53381725306351900012013-02-17T21:16:22.651-05:002013-02-17T21:16:22.651-05:00I loved your query. It gives us the conflict and w...I loved your query. It gives us the conflict and we hope for the resolution. I think your first 250 was strong and I would definitely like to hear more about it.<br /><br />#21Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-28385094363352944912013-02-17T20:31:00.740-05:002013-02-17T20:31:00.740-05:00I really liked your Query and I thought your First...I really liked your Query and I thought your First 250 was really good. I would keep reading.<br /><br />#39Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com