tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post1706278499186723816..comments2024-03-20T07:22:57.464-04:00Comments on Cupid's Literary Connection: Bouncer Post #64CUPIDhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/01726782711068858241noreply@blogger.comBlogger4125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-63180274769918190072012-02-13T13:09:21.634-05:002012-02-13T13:09:21.634-05:00Thank you so much! I don't think a writer can...Thank you so much! I don't think a writer can ever receive a bigger compliment than 'I'd read more' :)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-81318260981307388182012-02-13T13:08:30.391-05:002012-02-13T13:08:30.391-05:00I'm not entirely who you are, oh great mammal ...I'm not entirely who you are, oh great mammal of the sea, but you seem to give out exceptional advice to each and every poster. Thank you so much and I will take all of your advice to heart and begin revising as soon as the comp's over.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-86970350624429279822012-02-13T08:51:19.475-05:002012-02-13T08:51:19.475-05:00I thought the last paragraph of your 250 was absol...I thought the last paragraph of your 250 was absolutely wonderful description. The other two paragraphs have their strengths too but there is some confusion - like the last line of para 2. I think I know what you mean but it is not immediately clear. ALl together, the opening is really strong and would make me keep reading. I have reservations about the query. I think the solution would be to focus more on a kind of point by point exposing of what the story is without trying to duplicate the strong descriptiveness of the manuscript writing itself. But, again, your opening 250 is effective and strong.Happy Dolphinnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-76303959616828993292012-02-13T08:17:54.928-05:002012-02-13T08:17:54.928-05:00Very cool description in your first 250! I really ...Very cool description in your first 250! I really got a perfect image of the city he was looking out on and I am curious about that boy. Is he the one in the query with the orbs? I'd read more:)Deanahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17958057331230037880noreply@blogger.com