tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post1810210362307770810..comments2024-03-20T07:22:57.464-04:00Comments on Cupid's Literary Connection: Surprise Agent Invasion #47CUPIDhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/01726782711068858241noreply@blogger.comBlogger3125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-70572763340664067022012-04-12T15:23:07.426-04:002012-04-12T15:23:07.426-04:00I loved this and would really like to keep reading...I loved this and would really like to keep reading. Great premise and voice. Please send the first 50 pages, attached as a Word document (.doc), to submissions@fullcircleliterary.com. In the subject line, please include my name and Agent Invasion. Really looking forward to hearing from you! This is just up my alley. <br />All my best, <br />Taylor Martindale<br />Full Circle LiteraryTaylor Martindalehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17927088375331596378noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-70646389607375560162012-04-09T14:03:18.282-04:002012-04-09T14:03:18.282-04:00I empathize and connect to Sarah immediately. I f...I empathize and connect to Sarah immediately. I feel her frustration. Her voice is clear and strong. I like the idea of their sisterly bond playing a prominent role in the book, and I'm curious to see how the story unfolds. Could you send me the complete manuscript at: submissions at abliterary dot com?Annie Bomkehttp://www.abliterary.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-44137533404506598872012-03-27T22:28:00.501-04:002012-03-27T22:28:00.501-04:00The opening here is certainly gripping. We know so...The opening here is certainly gripping. We know something horrible has happened, but like the protagonist, we don't know anything yet, but we're going to keep reading. It would be difficult to put to stop after this first page certainly, since you have to find out what was going on! So good work! <br /><br />Now, on the book's premise, we'd need some explanation as to why the main character is left to manage everything single-handedly when she has, literally, just turned 18. There are no guardians named in the parents' wills? Why is no one at the hospital with her? Parents' friends? Her friends? Wouldn't a girl that age immediately call her best friends and closest relatives or neighbors to come to the hospital? Barely 18 isn't old enough to be guaranteed guardianship of her younger sibling, so work to make this authentic and overcome any obstacles she might face in being allowed to care for her sister with the two of them living alone. It sounds like a great concept with a lot of potential and room for character development. A very challenging plot! Good luck!Gina Panettierihttp://www.talcottnotch.netnoreply@blogger.com