tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post2207910138119957466..comments2024-03-29T05:20:50.447-04:00Comments on Cupid's Literary Connection: Bouncer Round 6 #8CUPIDhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/01726782711068858241noreply@blogger.comBlogger4125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-27090611096992577232013-02-19T12:28:02.830-05:002013-02-19T12:28:02.830-05:00I want to read more! I really enjoyed the first 25...I want to read more! I really enjoyed the first 250. The voice is strong and I already like Lilly. <br /><br />Good luck from #20!Chrissyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15826156396531424726noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-1159232690302756982013-02-19T11:08:12.194-05:002013-02-19T11:08:12.194-05:00This sounds great!
The only suggestion I have fo...This sounds great! <br /><br />The only suggestion I have for the query is that you could leave a little of the detail out for finding the diary. It's probably enough to say that she finds it and get on with the cool stuff.<br /><br />Love her voice in the first 250, she sounds like an awesome girl to get to know. It was a little jaring to me that the first pg was past tense (because she was remembering) and then it jumps to present tense. All correct, it's just that I noticed it. Probably because I'm not always a huge fan of present, so it stands out. The only suggestion I could make is to get something present tense first, then the memory/facts are logically in past tense w/o seeming out of place.<br /><br />But this is really just a nit - I loved it and would want to read more.GSMarlenehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17558162486383585621noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-77186905819700739652013-02-18T15:57:52.775-05:002013-02-18T15:57:52.775-05:00I totally want to read more of Lilly. What a cute ...I totally want to read more of Lilly. What a cute obsession!<br /><br />This is probably a really stupid question but: do people play Mario Bros. anymore? I'm admittedly out of the loop on this, but I kinda thought no? Just a thought.<br /><br />Carissa #24<br /><br />Carissahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10594436685900756259noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-84851504898407427142013-02-17T22:00:41.435-05:002013-02-17T22:00:41.435-05:00I love this. I love that a 12 year old girl is a L...I love this. I love that a 12 year old girl is a Lincoln fan-girl. What a great combo of modern lingo and history nerd. Your voice is so strong.<br /><br />I have nothing to add. I think it is just great. <br /><br />Best of luck!<br />Amy <br />@aereichertaereicherthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00548305046663514133noreply@blogger.com