tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post5905318857520776951..comments2024-03-20T07:22:57.464-04:00Comments on Cupid's Literary Connection: Hey! Hey! Writer Spotlight!!!!CUPIDhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/01726782711068858241noreply@blogger.comBlogger11125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-71282522385715917672013-07-19T22:27:55.575-04:002013-07-19T22:27:55.575-04:00I don't know how I missed this! I know I'm...I don't know how I missed this! I know I'm a little late, but wanted to say that not only is Emily's story a ton of fun, but she is so super sweet. :)I Write for Appleshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12922633626300586654noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-69995654356525350712012-11-05T22:12:21.986-05:002012-11-05T22:12:21.986-05:00Thanks for your kind comments and feedback. I real...Thanks for your kind comments and feedback. I really appreciate it. And thanks again to the marvelous Cupid for having me!!Emilyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12668397125356949829noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-69512224447337915152012-11-04T16:19:27.452-05:002012-11-04T16:19:27.452-05:00AHHHH JK Rowling is your hero?! Mine too! My blog ...AHHHH JK Rowling is your hero?! Mine too! My blog is partially dedicated to her :) You are now my favorite :)<br /><br />Awesome query. I think I've seen it before; maybe with the Authoress? Only crit: you can combine the first three sentences to make it sound less clunky, like "...spontaneous, but she's not - especially...." Hope I helped :)SC Authorhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10382410035007943921noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-3999801666019779402012-11-02T13:29:59.695-04:002012-11-02T13:29:59.695-04:00Fabulous query and first page, totally drew me in ...Fabulous query and first page, totally drew me in and I wanted to read more. The interview was even better--could see why Emily would write perfectly for MG, she gets how to make the oddities funny in a good way. Can't wait to see this published, hope it's soon. Connie Sokolhttp://www.8basics.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-73331747740696116982012-11-01T13:18:29.984-04:002012-11-01T13:18:29.984-04:00Hi Emily! Okay, before I start, I have to tell you...Hi Emily! Okay, before I start, I have to tell you that I ALSO have a geographic tongue. I did not know this until my last dental appt, when the hygienist told me. (I am over 20. Okay, over 30. Um, 40.) Does this mean it came later in life? Got worse? Just escaped my notice? No idea. My father has what's called a "perforated tongue." Alright, enough about that. <br /><br />Your novel sounds really fun and intriguing! First, a few things I liked about the query:<br /><br />1.) "So when she and her fearless cousin Jake stumble upon century-old clues leading to gold coins hidden by Butch Cassidy—farm boy turned infamous bank robber of the Wild West" - wow, fantastic condensing of lots of info into a concise query-friendly snip. <br /><br />2.) "But Maggie's newfound courage falters when she learns they must outsmart and outrun a dangerous thief who is also after the treasure." Great way to clearly tell us the conflict, which is then followed by MORE conflict (Jake's capture)<br /><br />3.) "until mystery and history collide." LOVE this. If I was an agent, I'd request a full on this cleverness alone.<br /><br />Advice: "she crumples her "to-do" list to prove she really can be daring and impulsive." I just want a tiny bit more here. Why does she decide to change at this juncture? Is it that the adventure is so big, she finally has to stop saying 'no' to adventures? <br /><br />The first page is wonderful. The pacing is practically perfect and you give us a good idea of Maggie's personality in just a few short paragraphs! Only thing I would change is the word "examined" (re: her watch). Examined makes it sound like it takes a long time, but she's presumably already familiar with the watch and it's more likely she just glances at it to check the time, then pushes the button. This is a very small thing, of course. It just took me a little out of the story. <br /><br />I think it's great. I want to know why she's so compulsive about doing things within certain time limits, and I'd keep reading just for that -- not to mention the mystery/history angle.<br /><br />Good luck.<br /><br />Evonne LackAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-70640260321922006372012-10-31T22:55:53.690-04:002012-10-31T22:55:53.690-04:00Great interview, Cupid! I've seen Emily's ...Great interview, Cupid! I've seen Emily's entry in a contest or two and it's really cool to meet the author. (I've had my Harold in those same contests.)<br /><br />Awesome query and first page, Emily! I think this is such a cute story. Kids will eat it up! It reminds me a little of Holes and I love how the history is mixed in with the mystery.<br /><br />I wonder if you need the "And" in your second paragraph of your query, but that's really just a tiny, and maybe petty, thing. I'm sure your query will capture an agent's attention and the first page will make them want to read more. Well done! <br /><br />Good luck!Dana Ehttp://momslifeponderings.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-24421446248676560262012-10-31T16:26:39.411-04:002012-10-31T16:26:39.411-04:00I've seen this pitch on some of the blog conte...I've seen this pitch on some of the blog contests; I don't tend to read a lot of the MG stuff since I feel like I have no expertise whatsoever in the genre; it's so different than YA. I love the story idea. I think your query is strong. The only thing I would suggest is I don't think you need the line "But she's not." below:<br /><br />Twelve-year-old Maggie McCoy wants to be brave and spontaneous. But she's not. Especially when it comes to school bullies and flying by the seat of her pants. <br /><br />Do you see what I mean? I think you can get away with the next sentence and we get that if she WANTS to be brave and spontaneous, it probably means she isn't but is working toward it. Kind of takes the wind out of the sails with that little line and it works without it. Take that for what it's worth. Good luck querying!!Stephscohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06328839483008086049noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-46917529542807798612012-10-31T15:13:22.700-04:002012-10-31T15:13:22.700-04:00I don't have any criticism, because your query...I don't have any criticism, because your query is great and your first page drew me in. I think I saw this on GUTGAA and I thought it sounded like a great MG read. Love the idea of a series of adventures across the 50 states. Best of luck!Carla Luna Cullenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10245197620080383172noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-15727635394865033352012-10-31T12:32:32.223-04:002012-10-31T12:32:32.223-04:00Aww, thanks for the shout out. I love, love, love ...Aww, thanks for the shout out. I love, love, love RACE TO BUTCH CASSIDY'S GOLD. i can't wait for it to come out in book form soon. ;)Brenda Drakehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01263237745979525170noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-50082182085262691362012-10-31T12:07:54.126-04:002012-10-31T12:07:54.126-04:00Great interview. "He had a mullet and I had 5...Great interview. "He had a mullet and I had 5-inch high bangs." Haha. <br /><br />The query and first page are solid! This sounds like something my son would love. Good luck!!Jenny S. Morrishttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00482342313938669366noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-52309663663615521152012-10-31T11:50:07.878-04:002012-10-31T11:50:07.878-04:00I love what you've done with this query since ...I love what you've done with this query since I last saw it during WriteOnCon. It's so solid now! Best of luck in your search for representation!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com