tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post6337629820137827357..comments2024-03-20T07:22:57.464-04:00Comments on Cupid's Literary Connection: Surprise Agent Invasion #27CUPIDhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/01726782711068858241noreply@blogger.comBlogger3125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-27481931340308099592012-04-03T16:03:20.280-04:002012-04-03T16:03:20.280-04:00Novels told through journal entries/letters are no...Novels told through journal entries/letters are not usually my favorite but I like that this isn't the usual big-girl-gets-a-makeover-and-gets-revenge-on-the-people-who-teased her storyline. I'd love to take a look at a bit more... please send me the 1st 50 pages + synopsis hardcopy. My mailing address is on my website, www.bradfordlit.comLaura Bradfordhttp://www.bradfordlit.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-30308569993060125322012-03-29T18:09:19.309-04:002012-03-29T18:09:19.309-04:00I really like the concept for this book, with your...I really like the concept for this book, with your main character being the voice behind a teen sensation. What a conflict she's faced with! She can't tell anyone the truth without ruining her career. <br /><br />The opening, though, had a few first-time author errors. It doesn't begin with anything gripping. You're opening with 'dear journal, I have nothing to write because my life is boring'. What motivation is there to keep reading? <br /><br />Then the main character lists her physical features. This is a weak way for us to get an idea of what she looks like. It feels like you're trying to get that nasty ol' task out of the way early and the easiest way possible! <br /><br />Start instead with action and dialogue (or texts, or a phone call, something), give us something that would really make us want to keep reading. <br /><br />I hope my comments make sense. I think you could have a lot of fun with this plot. Good luck!Gina Panettierihttp://www.talcottnotch.netnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-67195158510258449732012-03-29T17:01:39.213-04:002012-03-29T17:01:39.213-04:00Sounds fun! Please send the first three chapters t...Sounds fun! Please send the first three chapters to query@psliterary.com with the subject heading: Cupid's Literary Connection: Holly Hearts Hollywood.<br /><br />Thanks! CarlyCarly Wattershttp://www.psliterary.comnoreply@blogger.com