tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post6827900698093953186..comments2024-03-20T07:22:57.464-04:00Comments on Cupid's Literary Connection: CAGI Entry #49CUPIDhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/01726782711068858241noreply@blogger.comBlogger21125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-20799984218316606182012-09-12T19:09:48.798-04:002012-09-12T19:09:48.798-04:00Eeee, look at all the happy comments on this entry...Eeee, look at all the happy comments on this entry! You go, Erin!Tamarahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16466014613515065083noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-72757703837895415752012-09-07T12:56:58.464-04:002012-09-07T12:56:58.464-04:00I LOVED this entry from WriteOnCon!! And I really ...I LOVED this entry from WriteOnCon!! And I really like the changes you made to the query. <br /><br />Your first 250 totally made me laugh because I was having flashbacks of sneaking out of the house as a teen and crossing my fingers that the door didn't creak. :) <br /><br />I would definitely want to read this book. Great job and good luck!<br /><br />Mine is entry 43 if you want to check it out. :)Kris F. Oliverhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15693161921442719783noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-19544696944318858302012-09-07T11:57:33.450-04:002012-09-07T11:57:33.450-04:00Great query letter! So much conflict, and the voic...Great query letter! So much conflict, and the voice shines through. I would definitely want to read on.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02933043909094271407noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-70398727570074064742012-09-06T20:45:28.427-04:002012-09-06T20:45:28.427-04:00This is awesome. I mean it, really great. If you&#...This is awesome. I mean it, really great. If you're looking for a beta reader on this, stop by my blog. It's www.onemagicbeanbuyer.com I don't read a lot of contemporary YA, but this sounds right up my alley. I will be amazed if this doesn't get picked. <br /><br />Mine is entry 29 if you want to check it out. <br />Good luck with it!! Tamarahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04070551912944266954noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-43289180850095498002012-09-06T17:48:42.440-04:002012-09-06T17:48:42.440-04:00Hah, I love the voice of the narrator and the prem...Hah, I love the voice of the narrator and the premise caught my attention. I would love to see how this book turns out 8DDarth Lolitahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18042975826918171575noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-73573684072326018252012-09-06T14:01:07.079-04:002012-09-06T14:01:07.079-04:00Great opening scene to let readers fall for Hanley...Great opening scene to let readers fall for Hanley. Really want to read more.<br />Best of luck!Chris Daynoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-32776772447166046592012-09-06T13:58:06.963-04:002012-09-06T13:58:06.963-04:00such a great, intriguing query. Very good. such a great, intriguing query. Very good. Random Andrewshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15056900421889361560noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-70000471798248715212012-09-05T22:19:28.202-04:002012-09-05T22:19:28.202-04:00The query intrigued me, but then the first 250 wor...The query intrigued me, but then the first 250 words made me fall in love! The voice is perfect and makes me want to read more about this character! Sounds like a great mixture of humor and drama!Gwen Carikernoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-62167456757979494752012-09-05T20:27:36.959-04:002012-09-05T20:27:36.959-04:00I totally dig this concept. It's so simple...b...I totally dig this concept. It's so simple...but it's so NOT at the same time. I'd say maybe shorten the query just a teensy bit- that's only my opinion.<br /><br />As for the writing- good, humorous voice. Seems like a fun character I could learn to love REALLY quickly. Want to know what happens, for sure, with the way this story progresses. Rock on!!Lindsay Cummings authorhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06721618350348515189noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-52450689439877998872012-09-05T18:51:57.110-04:002012-09-05T18:51:57.110-04:00I really, really like this. The query sets up the...I really, really like this. The query sets up the relationship so nicely, and I love the line "he assists her with complicated concepts such as walking and using door handles". Ha! Your first 250 pulled me right in - I think you really captured the drunken sneak-back-into the house mentality in a realistic and honest way. I want more!SStokeshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03607391693287377280noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-81255379325797344042012-09-05T17:41:06.691-04:002012-09-05T17:41:06.691-04:00Love how the query shows how much conflict this st...Love how the query shows how much conflict this story has! The last line is also a fantastic hook. <br /><br />Yep, going to have to agree with everyone else. The voice here is great. A lot of tension (and humor) in the first few paragraphs. Drew me right in! I would definitely read more :)Jessica Leakehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03443106239685216080noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-73750268393918031992012-09-05T15:22:40.702-04:002012-09-05T15:22:40.702-04:00I remember this clearly from WriteOnCon. I'm n...I remember this clearly from WriteOnCon. I'm not usually a contemp fan, but this I would read in a heartbeat! Awesome job on both the query and the pages.Trionahttp://thinkingtoinking.blogspot.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-48673668066915891032012-09-05T14:00:39.161-04:002012-09-05T14:00:39.161-04:00Aaah I got SUCH chills from the ending of that que...Aaah I got SUCH chills from the ending of that query! I would read this in a second! Dahlia Adlerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02265012593385220677noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-20590527948094572822012-09-05T13:48:35.397-04:002012-09-05T13:48:35.397-04:00Oh I want to read this!Oh I want to read this!Jennifer L. Armentrouthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00913648987251002847noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-35363195912522872822012-09-05T13:00:57.814-04:002012-09-05T13:00:57.814-04:00LOVE it! I would read this in a heartbeat. I'...LOVE it! I would read this in a heartbeat. I'm with Jennifer in that I'm not totally in love with the title, but depending on the cover, I may have picked up the book anyway (and I'd have been VERY glad I did).Jodie Andrefskihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02991534398238542843noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-9909615547117460902012-09-05T12:19:52.938-04:002012-09-05T12:19:52.938-04:00Love, love, love.Love, love, love.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01866320252287612514noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-71477335060587362202012-09-05T10:46:07.073-04:002012-09-05T10:46:07.073-04:00I love this concept! Great voice and interesting h...I love this concept! Great voice and interesting hook. Good luck!Sarah Hensonhttp://wordencounters.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-49583498834578438502012-09-05T09:54:03.407-04:002012-09-05T09:54:03.407-04:00Really great writing- I especially love the line a...Really great writing- I especially love the line about his assisting her in using door handles!! In my house it was the fourth step, but I can really relate to this scene. As a mom of twins I'm a little disturbed by all the queries in this contest where one twin dies, but as a reader, I'm intrigued! The only thing I'm not absolutely in love with is the title, but otherwise, I'd read this book today!!Jennifer Malonehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10267842989895421642noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-91569450218010825932012-09-05T09:31:01.561-04:002012-09-05T09:31:01.561-04:00Oh man I love that query. I want that book. Like n...Oh man I love that query. I want that book. Like now. And I can really relate to the first 250. Lovely job!rhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09472552752365062115noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-70923665378090765892012-09-05T07:30:46.010-04:002012-09-05T07:30:46.010-04:00I find this awesome. The query brings the intrigue...I find this awesome. The query brings the intrigue. When I got to the end, I swear my eyebrows were raised- in a good way.<br /><br />I feel the same about the first 50. The voice is great. I was there with her. Everyone can relate to creaky floors and stairs. I'd follow this MC for an an entire novel!RaeChellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07661557579359565390noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-28475139686227487202012-09-05T05:21:04.558-04:002012-09-05T05:21:04.558-04:00Oh, I just LOVE this query. There's conflict f...Oh, I just LOVE this query. There's conflict from start to finish and it ends with such a feeling of being tugged in two directions--really makes me want to read it!<br /><br />And the first 250 starts the story off with such a bang. I remember those days (shhh! don't tell my parents!) of tiptoeing through the house past curfew. I loved every description and the little bits of characterization you managed to weave in there. And the voice just pops out at you.<br /><br />Fantastic job!Jeanmarie Anayahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15444097096666633756noreply@blogger.com