tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post7117293497163444315..comments2024-03-29T05:20:50.447-04:00Comments on Cupid's Literary Connection: Bouncer Round 6 #9CUPIDhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/01726782711068858241noreply@blogger.comBlogger8125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-37734610541658342132013-02-19T17:45:03.257-05:002013-02-19T17:45:03.257-05:00This is totally a theme that is going to resonate ...This is totally a theme that is going to resonate with a lot of people TTC!Carissahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10594436685900756259noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-80122352467815931092013-02-19T14:24:46.333-05:002013-02-19T14:24:46.333-05:00I also enjoyed the tension between Ryan and Victor...I also enjoyed the tension between Ryan and Victoria in your excerpt. Well written!<br /><br />Larissa (#18)Larissahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08874147599272424056noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-26212396209545931302013-02-19T11:07:15.877-05:002013-02-19T11:07:15.877-05:00I appreciate your thoughts! Thank you for sharing....I appreciate your thoughts! Thank you for sharing. I'll definitely consider finding a way to answer your questions in the query. I try to tow the line though of telling too much in the query (don't want a mini-synopsis there) but also illustrating the stakes. <br /><br />Thanks again! Virginia Piercehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11588698042858650140noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-79276585569821153212013-02-19T11:04:46.699-05:002013-02-19T11:04:46.699-05:00Thanks for the comments! The query just dabbles in...Thanks for the comments! The query just dabbles in the idea, but of course, the book delves into the "whys" much deeper, plus her role as a daughter, and why she thinks she can "fix" it with having her own daughter. Virginia Piercehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11588698042858650140noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-38005605881407772102013-02-19T11:03:03.533-05:002013-02-19T11:03:03.533-05:00Bonnie, thanks for your comments! Yeah, this is su...Bonnie, thanks for your comments! Yeah, this is such a closeted subject, that I wanted to bring it to light :) And woefully, yes there is a word missing. The sentence does read like you said. I don't know where the *think* ran off to, because it's in the original document. I guess it got somewhere :( <br /><br />Thanks again! Virginia Piercehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11588698042858650140noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-18495493470007148402013-02-19T10:57:32.784-05:002013-02-19T10:57:32.784-05:00Ooh, I find your premise intriguing! Because wanti...Ooh, I find your premise intriguing! Because wanting a boy or a girl is such a personal and often confessed to only the closest of friends and family, I don't feel a need to know the why in the query. The fact that she wants a girl resonates.<br /><br />I like the subtle tension between Victoria and Ryan as they wait. One little thing: I think a word is missing in this line: “I still [think?] the baby’s going to be a girl,” Ryan said, flipping briskly through a sports magazine.<br /><br />Best of luck!<br />Bonnie #12Bonnie Staringhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15617661715759556106noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-51741550367979492772013-02-18T12:58:24.789-05:002013-02-18T12:58:24.789-05:00Oooh, great premise. I like your query but would a...Oooh, great premise. I like your query but would also like a little more as to why it's so important for the next baby to be a girl. I'd like some more background on Victoria's role as a daughter. I'm really interested in Victoria's relationship with Lacey! That's the part of the query that really makes me want to read on. Good luck, and thanks for stopping by my entry!<br />-Amy (#34)Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14370905964733084767noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-2392143163529687962013-02-18T10:35:21.769-05:002013-02-18T10:35:21.769-05:00I like your premise. I'm wondering if it's...I like your premise. I'm wondering if it's possible to tell us more about the stakes in the query. You mentioned the "lackluster" relationship between Victoria and her mother...is there more that can be said about that? Is Lacey risking her marriage to pursue gender selection? <br /><br />I'd definitely read more! Good luck! <br />#20<br /><br />Chrissyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15826156396531424726noreply@blogger.com