tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post7592045108036648402..comments2024-03-29T05:20:50.447-04:00Comments on Cupid's Literary Connection: Bouncer Post #1CUPIDhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/01726782711068858241noreply@blogger.comBlogger11125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-72677400919987567742012-02-09T15:10:07.222-05:002012-02-09T15:10:07.222-05:00New query. (It's got to be better than the one...New query. (It's got to be better than the one I submitted originally!)<br /><br />Maria learns the brutal, murderous history of her society and realizes no one is safe. She fears for her newborn and knows she must do whatever it takes to save her. Authorites, Enforcers and Gatekeepers be damned. Desperation is a powerful weapon.<br /><br />Okay. . .I'll keep at this query thing until I get it right.Harriet Parkehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13985851403409368577noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-75080594164723011252012-02-08T04:39:55.189-05:002012-02-08T04:39:55.189-05:00Very cool! The query felt fine to me, but then I&#...Very cool! The query felt fine to me, but then I'm definitely NOT the query-expert...lol (just check out the comments on mine - #39). <br /><br />I'd totally keep reading and I'm really not a fan of dystopian these days. Sounds like you've set up a very plausible world with this one, though. Reminds me a little of "The Giver"--my most fave dystopian ever! :)<br /><br />Good luck!Rachel A. Markshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13380443433159320259noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-82197674914215351182012-02-07T22:25:20.988-05:002012-02-07T22:25:20.988-05:00Is it too late to post a sharper, shorter query? I...Is it too late to post a sharper, shorter query? I think I made some kind of stone soup between query and synopsis in my entry. Yuck.Harriet Parkehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13985851403409368577noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-85059141142579590432012-02-07T09:12:32.141-05:002012-02-07T09:12:32.141-05:00Owl: It's a lot more fun writing a book than w...Owl: It's a lot more fun writing a book than writing a query! But the suggestions you are making, well, they make sense!I know I can do a better query if I stick to the voice of the novel. I'm glad you liked the first 250.Harriet Parkehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13985851403409368577noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-38777829087859196432012-02-07T08:54:27.963-05:002012-02-07T08:54:27.963-05:00I think you can save some of your query for a shor...I think you can save some of your query for a short synopsis and just hit the high points for the actual Q. I think it might be important especially for those agents who don't ask for sample pages or for those who don't even read the sample if the query doesn't grab them. But, I really enjoyed the sample 250. I liked the casual mention of details that showed the new reality that the MC lives in. I would definitely keep reading.Owlnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-56285418426762981622012-02-07T06:59:22.264-05:002012-02-07T06:59:22.264-05:00Angela and Bouncer Iheartbooks: Thanks for your co...Angela and Bouncer Iheartbooks: Thanks for your comments. I will definitely check out the query crit forum at Absolute Write! <br /><br />Angela: What are you doing up at 2:09 am? And Bouncer. . .you're up at 1:08 am?Harriet Parkehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13985851403409368577noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-16026869979203146912012-02-07T02:09:40.969-05:002012-02-07T02:09:40.969-05:00I'm with Bouncer. I got lost in the query. Par...I'm with Bouncer. I got lost in the query. Part of it is a formatting problem. You need to break it up into smaller paragraphs. And you have lots of complicated sentences. Keep it simple.<br /><br />But your first 250 words rock! If you can infuse your query with some of the voice you have in your story--you are gold :)Angela Cothranhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09243582290698922119noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-70245252219666175202012-02-07T01:08:03.646-05:002012-02-07T01:08:03.646-05:00Hmmm. I suppose the importance of the query depen...Hmmm. I suppose the importance of the query depends on the agent and whether your premise and writing alone can capture them. If you end up querying again, you might want to consider reworking the query and pruning it down to the story's essentials.<br /><br />For what it's worth, I think the one long paragraph threw me a bit, and it was a lot of information to take in at once. If you're up for it, the query crit forum over at Absolute Write is super helpful. Good luck!Bouncer Iheartbooksnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-9281703109448307822012-02-06T20:53:49.431-05:002012-02-06T20:53:49.431-05:00Why, thank you! We'd love to have you. It'...Why, thank you! We'd love to have you. It's a great group. . .all ages, all genres, all supportive, gently critical, spot on suggestions. Super mentor. I should have run my query by them to make it better. How important is the query in this point of the competition?Harriet Parkehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13985851403409368577noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-51592133655374553052012-02-06T19:49:08.150-05:002012-02-06T19:49:08.150-05:00I just want to join the "Madwomen writing pro...I just want to join the "Madwomen writing program."<br />Congratulations!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-42782827322436819982012-02-06T18:23:24.538-05:002012-02-06T18:23:24.538-05:00Honestly, your query lost me...BUT your first 250 ...Honestly, your query lost me...BUT your first 250 won me over. You're in! Good luck!Bouncer Iheartbooksnoreply@blogger.com