tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post4151857719622598390..comments2024-03-29T05:20:50.447-04:00Comments on Cupid's Literary Connection: Bouncer Post #48CUPIDhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/01726782711068858241noreply@blogger.comBlogger16125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-65731686154261864652013-01-24T14:52:57.546-05:002013-01-24T14:52:57.546-05:00I adored this! The query does a great job of entic...I adored this! The query does a great job of enticing me to read the book. Then the first chapter is packed full of action and vivid details that paint a perfect picture of Tobin's surroundings. I'd definitely keep reading and would love to share something like this with my kids. I think both girls AND boys would enjoy this story and that's a hard thing to accomplish. Marlana Antifithttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04618800081521893095noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-53016858431565068662013-01-23T20:50:16.247-05:002013-01-23T20:50:16.247-05:00Thank you! I got tons of query input during Cupid&...Thank you! I got tons of query input during Cupid's CAGI contest last fall and now it seems to be working much better. :) Best of luck with your entry, too! I love stories that involve museums. Rinahttp://www.rinaheisel.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-55082418467909837792013-01-23T20:04:36.029-05:002013-01-23T20:04:36.029-05:00I love this! Tobin seems like he'd be a great ...I love this! Tobin seems like he'd be a great character to get to know throughout a book. The setting is described perfectly - I didn't feel disconnected the way I sometimes do with fantasy. <br /><br />I really like the way you lay out the stakes in the query. The first two sentences of the second paragraph in the query are a bit redundant. You could put those two together to make the query tighter. <br /><br />Like someone else said above, this reminds me of The Secret of NIMH (which I love!).<br /><br />Good luck! Rooting for you. :)<br /><br />Gail (#60)gailecnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08004265486129312885noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-79988057336739738772013-01-23T18:12:04.724-05:002013-01-23T18:12:04.724-05:00Thanks, Copernicus! You nailed it- Watership Down ...Thanks, Copernicus! You nailed it- Watership Down and Secret of NIMH are a couple of my favorites. Watership Down, especially, could be pretty intense at times. I loved that as a kid! I also love sibling/buddy stories so it's nice to hear the relationships came through in the query. That's where I think the heart of this lies. <br /><br />Best of luck to you, too. I really enjoyed your entry! :) Rinahttp://www.rinaheisel.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-3732936150316260142013-01-23T17:58:27.961-05:002013-01-23T17:58:27.961-05:00Thank you Peggy! :) Thank you Peggy! :) Rinahttp://www.rinaheisel.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-60916223443321443222013-01-23T17:56:32.321-05:002013-01-23T17:56:32.321-05:00Thank you Mandy! I loved your entry too. :) I'...Thank you Mandy! I loved your entry too. :) I'm trying to convey what a dangerous world it is for these little guys so I'm very glad to hear that feeling came across! Rinahttp://www.rinaheisel.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-62030447352129345652013-01-23T17:48:25.573-05:002013-01-23T17:48:25.573-05:00Thanks, Sam! :) Best of luck to you too! Thanks, Sam! :) Best of luck to you too! Rinahttp://www.rinaheisel.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-2710974763201665122013-01-23T17:45:52.371-05:002013-01-23T17:45:52.371-05:00Thank you so much! That you thought about your dau...Thank you so much! That you thought about your daughter liking this is about the nicest compliment ever! Spiders do make awesome bad guys- excluding Charlotte, of course. :) Do you have an entry up? Rinahttp://www.rinaheisel.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-84689863946628958492013-01-23T17:34:41.606-05:002013-01-23T17:34:41.606-05:00I've been trying so hard to get this "mou...I've been trying so hard to get this "mouse world" to feel authentic, so reading your comment makes me very happy! Thank you Natasha! :)Rinahttp://www.rinaheisel.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-22455329312364812392013-01-21T22:02:30.069-05:002013-01-21T22:02:30.069-05:00I loved your query - great tension and suspense!
...I loved your query - great tension and suspense!<br /><br />Good luck from #40!twinkieseednoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-39227412189595986622013-01-21T20:30:24.817-05:002013-01-21T20:30:24.817-05:00Wow - I loved the query. I got a vibe of Secret of...Wow - I loved the query. I got a vibe of Secret of Nimh meets watership down? Is that weird? And the funny thing is, I'm not that much of a fan of the "animal MC" but this drew me in. Probably because the query did such a good job of personalizing them. <br /><br />On to your 250, I enjoyed the voice here, a lot. The whole time I was reading it, I knew it was a mouse, yet it had so much personality. I don't know what to tell you, you drew me in - I want to read more.<br /><br />Good job and Good luck!<br /><br />-Copernicus (post #43)Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03926485525082822436noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-24462465732000164172013-01-21T18:42:13.719-05:002013-01-21T18:42:13.719-05:00I love it and am cheering for this story!I love it and am cheering for this story!PJ Sheridanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15054207556777719605noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-12286772571969847722013-01-21T14:25:39.256-05:002013-01-21T14:25:39.256-05:00I love it too!! The suspense draws you in right aw...I love it too!! The suspense draws you in right away and I was holding my breath. <br /><br />Great job!!<br /><br />Good luck!<br /><br />#61Mandyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16211243967843155367noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-2482906821422272172013-01-21T14:12:26.166-05:002013-01-21T14:12:26.166-05:00I love the voice in this! Good luck!I love the voice in this! Good luck!Sam F.https://www.blogger.com/profile/04034367402431479011noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-14871093416600860362013-01-21T13:52:31.918-05:002013-01-21T13:52:31.918-05:00Love, love, love. I love the rules, I love the big...Love, love, love. I love the rules, I love the big brother angle, I love that spiders are evil (because they are). I love your voice. I want to give this to my daughter now! Good luck!aereicherthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00548305046663514133noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-69173627034487603672013-01-21T10:45:24.956-05:002013-01-21T10:45:24.956-05:00What a vivid introduction. Felt and understood cha...What a vivid introduction. Felt and understood character’s set of mind from the first few sentences-never knew I can see from a mouse perspective :). Few paragraphs pulls you in with such an ease, it makes me wonder what happens next. Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15050381926165365526noreply@blogger.com