tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post9067451388972080317..comments2024-03-29T05:20:50.447-04:00Comments on Cupid's Literary Connection: Team CupidsLC #6 - BUT NOT FOR MECUPIDhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/01726782711068858241noreply@blogger.comBlogger64125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-72326975577910063182012-05-23T17:43:08.168-04:002012-05-23T17:43:08.168-04:00Oh, OK, phew! I didn't look at any of the comm...Oh, OK, phew! I didn't look at any of the comments before I wrote mine, but then after I posted and I saw how many people loved that line, I figured I had to be missing something. I guess that Urban Dictionary isn't up to date with all the latest usage!Tara Dairmanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02553180762608936696noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-11402013179913414762012-05-22T22:41:57.893-04:002012-05-22T22:41:57.893-04:00Whew! So glad you clarified that. I won't ev...Whew! So glad you clarified that. I won't even tell you what that word meant about a hundred years ago when I was in school.Suzan Teall Headleyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13508182507802493532noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-87680617244504338552012-05-22T17:12:41.074-04:002012-05-22T17:12:41.074-04:00I have to say that the line 'cooter punch'...I have to say that the line 'cooter punch' totally won me over! Anyone who puts that into their story has a sense of humor I'd love to read :) it made me lol! Great job!Amberhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00368485571268832781noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-8044346634745134662012-05-22T12:51:08.586-04:002012-05-22T12:51:08.586-04:00I've only lurked so I didn't see the first...I've only lurked so I didn't see the first draft query/first words. I admit my eyes *started* to roll at the Cinderella connection until I realized the protag is the supposed ugly stepsister. What a hook! And you made me LOL for real. Good luck with all your requests!Stephscohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06328839483008086049noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-50916772672744845452012-05-22T11:09:25.278-04:002012-05-22T11:09:25.278-04:00Hi Tara!
Thank you so much for taking the time t...Hi Tara! <br /><br />Thank you so much for taking the time to leave feedback on my entry! I appreciate your feedback, and I'm sure the rest of the entrants do to. <br /><br />I just want to make sure you know that the colloquial use of "cooter punch" by teens today (at least the kids at my school) isn't violent, but is just a joking way of saying you want to pop someone on the head or kick them in the shins--which is a pretty common feeling around these parts! <br /><br />HA! Anyway, I just wanted you to know that, so you wouldn't think it was some gruesome act in the context of my story! :)<br /><br />Have a great day, and thanks again for the input!KelsNotChelshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08589509934771708353noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-4617863250256074652012-05-22T10:27:14.458-04:002012-05-22T10:27:14.458-04:00#6 BUT NOT FOR ME
Query:
I like your title, whic...#6 BUT NOT FOR ME<br /><br />Query:<br /><br />I like your title, which immediately got the Gershwin song stuck in my head, but I wonder how many of today’s teens will connect with it—even the musical-theater aficionados. On the flip side, I guess that “cooter-punch” is current slang? I had to look it up, and was pretty horrified at the definition. I basically lost my empathy for Imogen when I read that, so wonder if you could find a slightly less violent/demeaning way in which she’d like to punish her new stepsister?<br /><br />Overall, it sounds like you’ve got a good storyline here, and the query is pretty polished.<br /><br />First page:<br /><br />The voice is great on this page. I love the “Houston, we have closure” line. =) My only issue is that the discourse on fairy tale princesses gets a little long. I really wanted to know why Imogen was forcing herself into her jeans—where she was heading, and why they’re paint-spattered. I think you could pare down on the interior monologue a bit to get us back into the present scene faster. In fact, I’m not sure that you need the “I’m not bitter…” paragraph at all—everything you spell out there has already been implied by the actions and thoughts earlier.Tara Dairmanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02553180762608936696noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-5899513041318795322012-05-21T23:12:41.265-04:002012-05-21T23:12:41.265-04:00I vote for this!!I vote for this!!Kevan Lyonhttp://www.marsallyonliteraryagency.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-25828913389741529652012-05-21T22:16:04.440-04:002012-05-21T22:16:04.440-04:00I vote for this!I vote for this!Roseanne Wellshttp://twitter.com/#!/rivetingrosienoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-52289004331455926712012-05-21T13:27:21.698-04:002012-05-21T13:27:21.698-04:00I vote for you! I absolutely loved this query and ...I vote for you! I absolutely loved this query and opening -- you had me laughing out loud from beginning to end. Can't wait to read :).Taylor Martindalehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17927088375331596378noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-7386887652377874882012-05-21T12:16:32.442-04:002012-05-21T12:16:32.442-04:00I love Imogen. And being a current weight loss wo...I love Imogen. And being a current weight loss work in progress, I know how much humor can hide the hurt. Fantastic job!Mehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09142463668076322465noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-63073245185651043972012-05-21T12:11:21.493-04:002012-05-21T12:11:21.493-04:00I vote for you!I vote for you!Susan Hawkhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09089666265680888535noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-31326237591937763342012-05-21T11:14:22.764-04:002012-05-21T11:14:22.764-04:00I vote for you!I vote for you!Andrea Sombergnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-43084177364529642102012-05-21T09:49:00.096-04:002012-05-21T09:49:00.096-04:00I vote for this one!I vote for this one!Lauren MacLeod of The Strothman Agencyhttp://www.strothmanagency.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-46199582172788752092012-05-20T22:00:53.948-04:002012-05-20T22:00:53.948-04:00And I'm so glad to be on yours!! Thanks for be...And I'm so glad to be on yours!! Thanks for being such a supportive teammate!KelsNotChelshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08589509934771708353noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-74833422108052263522012-05-20T21:59:54.124-04:002012-05-20T21:59:54.124-04:00Thank you, I love a fresh twist!Thank you, I love a fresh twist!KelsNotChelshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08589509934771708353noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-34573300420947991852012-05-20T21:58:40.754-04:002012-05-20T21:58:40.754-04:00Wow, thank you! As a teacher, I agree that the mor...Wow, thank you! As a teacher, I agree that the more characters we can put on our bookshelves, the more we kids and teens we can impact! Thanks!KelsNotChelshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08589509934771708353noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-59689832032678747042012-05-20T21:56:40.683-04:002012-05-20T21:56:40.683-04:00Thank you so much!Thank you so much!KelsNotChelshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08589509934771708353noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-62588777143130296432012-05-20T21:55:30.062-04:002012-05-20T21:55:30.062-04:00Hahaaa! I do too! Thanks!Hahaaa! I do too! Thanks!KelsNotChelshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08589509934771708353noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-90006788936208129992012-05-20T14:48:19.659-04:002012-05-20T14:48:19.659-04:00Ohhhhh Kels. What hilarity! What voice! And I must...Ohhhhh Kels. What hilarity! What voice! And I must read on to find out if the bitchy stepsister actually GETS a cooter-punch.<br /><br />You've worked your butt off on this, lady, and it's SO going to pay off. I can feel it. Very proud to be on your team! <3Leigh Annhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15827971896088856057noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-2742991530904123522012-05-20T10:30:30.588-04:002012-05-20T10:30:30.588-04:00"Houston, we have closure." Hilarious! W..."Houston, we have closure." Hilarious! What a voice!Jessica Schleyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12295725932463022104noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-45967755537296702672012-05-20T10:24:26.503-04:002012-05-20T10:24:26.503-04:00Fantastic, funny and wonderful. What a voice on Im...Fantastic, funny and wonderful. What a voice on Imogen.Jaye Robin Brownhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03929739858812153990noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-11701689396871568392012-05-19T16:53:18.327-04:002012-05-19T16:53:18.327-04:00This is absolutely fabulous! I LOVE the first line...This is absolutely fabulous! I LOVE the first line here! Great concept too! Good luck!Kimberly Gabrielhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05588782441929008886noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-62131089027089280872012-05-19T13:21:38.088-04:002012-05-19T13:21:38.088-04:00Wow. This is a great query. The voice is just perf...Wow. This is a great query. The voice is just perfect and Imogen is such a real character. Plus I love the twist on the traditional Cinderella tale. Good luck!Noelle Henryhttp://noellehenry.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-3961740983515125702012-05-19T04:44:29.645-04:002012-05-19T04:44:29.645-04:00This is incredible - and a very needed book on the...This is incredible - and a very needed book on the shelves at our local bookstores and libraries. I love the humorous voice, that the starring role and rockin' performance has the opposite effect in Imogen's life. I would love to read the entire book!!Jennie Baileyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02088195986628533511noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3349220550249399644.post-46044266180443791012012-05-19T00:30:01.084-04:002012-05-19T00:30:01.084-04:00Your changes are fantastic! Imogen is a character...Your changes are fantastic! Imogen is a character who is witty and packs a punch!<br /><br />Good luck!TYHatchhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00654651712633828288noreply@blogger.com