Wednesday, September 5, 2012

CAGI Entry #2


Title: THE CARNELIAN LEGACY
Genre: YA
Word Count: 87,000

Query:

After her father dies, eighteen-year-old Marisa MacCallum sets out to get as far away as possible from their hick Oregon town. She just never imagined she’d wind up in a parallel universe.

Ignoring her father’s warnings to stay out the woods of Gold Hill, she goes out riding and becomes injured when a freak storm slams the forest. She meets Darian Fiore, an arrogant young man on a diplomatic mission. Learning she has entered a parallel dimension and her only hope of returning home is to locate a scientist from Earth, Marisa must learn from Darian how she can survive attacks from Saquatch monsters, maniacs, and medieval knights. Falling in love was the last thing she needed.

When she discovers Darian is locked into an arranged marriage, Marisa’s heart shatters. After Darian’s cousin Savino offers her a future as his queen instead, Marisa is faced with an impossible choice: marry the archenemy of the man she loves or return to an empty life alone. As one man vies for her affections and the other fights for her life, Marisa is caught in the crossfire between two noblemen battling for control of an alternate dimension. Her only chance of escape rests in discovering the secret of an ancient legacy in time – one that will use all means possible to claim her life in the end.

First 250:

From the Journal of Alice MacCallum
Sunday, August 6th, 2000 9:34pm
I know I’ll be dead within the hour and nothing can save me.  While my life is ending, the man I trusted walks free. My body is paralyzed with a stinging pain but it can’t eclipse my feelings of guilt knowing what will happen tomorrow. I refuse to think about the unfairness of it all in the precious minutes I have left.

My dearest Alan, I’ve loved you since the day we met in that meadow all those years ago. I could have spent eternity with you but instead take those beautiful memories with me now. Please promise me you’ll protect little Marisa and baby Mark and give them extra love. Never let anything happen to them.  I wish I could hold you all just one more time before…

CHAPTER ONE - JACKSONVILLE
Marisa MacCallum wiped the tears blurring her vision, refusing to accept the fact that her father was gone. Closing her eyes, she could still see his bright blue eyes and infectious grin, teasing her about something. Slipping her arm under her uncle’s, she realized that while he could never take the place of her father, he was all she had left. She gazed up at autumn foliage surrounding the gravesite, reminding her that her eighteenth birthday was only two weeks away. After everything that had happened, a big celebration was the last thing she wanted.

CAGI Entry #1


Title: PERFECTLY BROKEN
Genre: YA memoir
Word Count: 66,000

Query:

At fifteen-years-old I’m a spitfire of a girl who’s as quick to throw a punch as I am to steal a kiss. When I’m kidnapped and raped, I put up one hell of a fight.
Set free, numb and in shock, I go straight to the police. Three days later the serial rapist is caught. Still it’s not enough. Fear and rage are my closest companions and I teeter-totter between the two. While preparing for trial I put on a brave face for the world, but the invisible scars leave me incapable of being touched. The first boy who tries almost gets a cheek full of knuckles.
A summer foreign exchange program to Spain comes at the perfect time. With the court date months away, a break from the pressures of the trial is exactly what I need. A gorgeous Spanish boy pursuing me was not in my brochure though. I try to resist his dreamy eyes and lickable teeth, but all my girl parts go beep, beep, beep every time he looks my way. The walls I spent all year building come crashing down as I learn to laugh again, touch again, love again. Now, torn by my desire to stay with the boy I love, I dread returning home to face my past. I know my case is the only solid one they have against that madman, but it means saying goodbye to Pedro. I have to decide what is more important—protecting my heart or protecting other women from a monster.

First 250:

I know at any moment he’ll kill me. His scorching breath is on my neck. His odor is imbedded in my nose. It’s only been minutes since he crawled off me, but the rape keeps replaying in my mind, torturing me over and over again.
He’s had me in his clutches for at least an hour. Or maybe it’s been ten minutes.
Time seems to stop right before you die.
Why am I still alive? What more- I stop myself. I won’t think about how he plans to kill me. And besides, I refuse to die in whatever way he’s chosen. I’m certain I won’t live much longer, but there is one thing I can do, if escaping is out of the question. I will not be going home to my family tonight, but I will send them my killer, my rapist, or rather his DNA buried beneath my fingernails when they find my dead body. At the first sign he’s done with me, I’ll strike. I know the second I claw his face off he’ll end my life. So I wait, patiently, for him to try to kill me.
The car stops. This is the moment.
He lets go of my head and snarls, “If you tell anyone, I’ll kill you,” then reaches across me and thrusts open the car door.
I see my escape and move so quickly I topple out backwards onto the curb. 
Daylight is almost gone, granting me just enough luminescent to see my surroundings

Monday, September 3, 2012

"Come And Get It!" Contest Info!!!!!

You've all been waiting so patiently for more contest fun, and the time has finally arrived.

I'm running behind on my schedule, so I'm gonna get right to the important points and try not to be too silly...

CONTEST: (Twitter: #CAGI)

Each entry includes the meat of the query and first 250 words. And must be accompanied by $4 donation. (Please read more on formatting and donation below.)

I am accepting 100 entries total. All of the entries will be open for public comment/critique. There will be 10 judges. Each will be assigned 10 entries, which they will critique in the comments section. When they are finished, they will choose their top 4 choices from their 10 entries to move into the agent round. So there will be a total of 40 entries from the 100 that make it into the "Come And Get It" agent round. (I wish it could be more, but it's just too hard on the agents to read more entries than that.)

Genres:

MG, YA, NA, Women's, Romance, Historical, Thrillers, Commercial, Literary, Memoir

Giveaway:

All of the 100 entries will be automatically entered into our giveaway party! Your entry number on the blog will be the number you'll use in the giveaway. The giveaway will include some great stuff from our judges so stay posted for more info on that! 

The 40 entries that make it into the agent round will be reposted and any of the participating agents can come and request off any they'd like to see more of! 

Judges: 


Contest Agent List: 


Email entries to CupidsLitConnection@yahoo.com

AUCTION:

So while the agents are going to "Come And Get It" in the contest, the writers get to "Come And Get It" during the auction. The auction part will have several agents (some from contest, some not) auctioning off different things to the un-agented writer with the highest bid. Each agent auction will have its own separate post and the bidding will take place in the comments section of that specific post. Each auction will start at a minimum of $10 and bids will be placed in increments of $2. So if the first bid is $10 then the next will be $12, and the next $14 and so on. The auction will open on the 10th and close on the 14th. 

Everything sounds pretty crazy and fun, right? It's gonna be awesome!!!!

EVENT TIMELINE:

9/4 - First Entry Window opens @10 AM EDT. Closes when 50 entries filled, plus 10 alternates.
9/5-9/7 - First 50 entries post on blog for judge/public critique.
9/7 - Second Entry Window opens @ 8 PM EDT. Closes when 50 entries filled, plus 10 alternates.
9/8 - First 20 entries to make it into agent round announced! 
9/10 - Auction posts open for bids.
9/12-9/14 - Second 50 entries post on the blog for judge/public critique.
9/14 (midnight EDT) - Auction posts close to bids.
9/15 - ALL entries to make it into agent round announced!
9/15 - Winners of auction and giveaway posted. 
9/17-9/20 - 40 entries posted to blog for agent round.
9/21 - Winners of "Come And Get It!" contest posted. 
9/22 - Cupid begins sleeping again :)


DONATION INFO: VERY IMPORTANT!!!!!!! 

YOUR ENTRY WILL NOT BE IN THE CONTEST UNTIL YOU DONATE THE $4!!

All the funds donated to "Come And Get It" will be used for book donations made to the children's units here at my local hospital. Due to being anonymous, I cannot reveal the name, so you'll just have to trust me. :)

The $4 donation must be made using the donation button in the right hand column on the blog. PLEASE DO NOT FORGET THIS PART! I will take the entries as first come first served through each email window up to 50, plus 10 alternates. So AFTER you have received your confirmation email IMMEDIATELY go to the donate button and donate $4! Make sure you use the SAME NAME on both email and donation!!! I will not add your entry to the contest unless your name is on the donate list. If I do not have your donation in a promptly manner, I will move onto an alternate! 

FORMATTING: VERY IMPORTANT!!!!!!! 

You guys know how much I enforce my formatting guidelines. These aren't to pick on you, torture you, or even to make it easier to read through. This is so that I don't pull quite as much hair out when I am moving the entries onto the blog. Cuz you know, when you do 100 entries....THAT'S ALOT!!!

PLEASE READ AND FOLLOW ALL OF THESE GUIDELINES!!!!

When you submit your entry please make it very simple:

No tabs or double spacing. I want it email style. Single spaced. One space between paragraphs. No tabs!

Just the meat of your material. No "Dear so and so". Or "I chose you because..." Just the meat of the query and first 250. You may add your SIMPLE credentials at the END of your query.

Your entry will be like this: (Yes, bold where bolded)

Title: NAME OF YOUR BOOK (Yes, CAPS there!!!)
Genre: Genre of your book
Word Count: Word count of your book

Query:

Your query formatted correctly. (per above guidelines)

First 250:

Your first 250 formatted correctly. (per above guidelines)

*Look at past entries for further example.*

SUBJECT of your email should be: TITLE - Your Name

THANK YOU!!!!! for following these specific guidelines. Makes me a happy little Cupid. 

Whew! Let me know if I missed anything!

(Email entries to CupidsLitConnection@yahoo.com and PLEASE FOLLOW ALL DIRECTIONS GIVEN HERE!)

Thursday, August 9, 2012

Another Successful Connection from "The Writer's Voice"!!!

I feel like this Connection has a special place in my little Cupid heart because I've seen Leigh Ann's ONE around before "The Writer's Voice" contest and it stuck with me because I was so very intrigued by it. And as you'll learn from the interview, Leigh Ann and ONE have had a very inspiring journey. Plus Leigh Ann is one of those people that you immediatly want to be friends with, and I am now lucky enough to consider her my friend. :) Join us and follow her here and here

Because of all this greatness, I feel terrible since this interview should've been up a week ago, but I was gone on vacation and had very limited computer access. SORRY! *ugly cry face*

But it's never NEVER too late to celebrate, so let's give a big welcome to Leigh Ann and her fabulous new agent, Tricia Lawrence from the Erin Murphy Literary Agency!!!

First, we'll start with Leigh Ann and then we'll here from Tricia. I know, I know. Hearing from both author and agent is the best, right?

C: First things first, what is your sweet of choice? 

L: Our local artisan ice cream shop makes ice cream sandwiches with macaroons as the cookie. They are TO DIE FOR. With coffee. Always coffee.

C: How long have you been writing? 

L: About a year and a half.  

C: How long did it take you to write ONE? 

L: From first word to CPs, four months, plus another five or six weeks for revisions according to their suggestions.  

C: How many did you query with this novel? 

L: 127. (Yes. One hundred and twenty-seven. Plus dozens of other agents saw it in various contests.) 

C: What made you decide to enter the contest? 

L: The Writer's Voice was ONE's last stand. After this contest, I was going to tuck it into a drawer and throw all my attention into my work-in-progress. So, I wanted to enter as sort of a reassurance to myself that I had done everything I could to see it grab an agent's attention.  

C: What is your favorite part of the writing process? 

L: Is it lame to say that I love it all? I love the inspired, frantic, slinging-words-down-whenever-and-wherever drafting phase; I freak out over critique partner feedback (yes, even when it's "delete 10k and rewrite a quarter of the chapters) because it means someone else loved it enough to give criticism to make it better; I get a charge out of tearing it apart and knitting it back together in ultimately more awesome ways during revisions. 

C: What is your least favorite part of the writing process? 

L: I guess if we're calling everything to do with writing part of the process, I hate the query trenches. HATE THEM. It's a special kind of hell that only the strongest people with the best support teams can survive for any significant length of time. Thankfully, I have the best support team on the planet.

C: If you could only pick up three things from the grocery store, what would they be? 

L: I assume this is a fun alternate universe where I don't have to stress about nourishing my children or my general health and well-being, right? Okay. Then, ice cream, brownies, and coffee. Always coffee. 

C: What advice do you have for other writers? 

L: Confession - I HATE giving advice for other writers, because inevitably it will apply to some people and make other people want to throw rotten tomatoes at me. Also, it makes me sound like I know what I'm doing, WHICH I DON'T. 

But. Here goes: Keep writing, if that's what makes you happy; surround yourself with helpful, loving, supportive people; keep sending your work out there if you believe in it. And help other people, a lot, with a full heart. 

C: What did you do to celebrate your offer? 

L: It just so happened that my husband and I had a work-sponsored all-expenses-paid, sans-kids trip to Sedona, Arizona coming up that weekend! So, I flew to Arizona and spent 36 hours sleeping when I wanted, reading, writing, and eating free, fancy food. It was awesome.  

C: Tell us a little about your success story:  

L: I finished the manuscript in January, with much encouragement from my critique partners that the story was solid, the characters were awesome, and my writing was much improved from my previous (drawered) manuscript. With the help of my CPs, I worked on the query for weeks, then queried my first batch of 30 agents. I got just two requests, so we went back to the drawing board and completely overhauled the query. The next query run yielded similar results. I reworked again, sent another batch of queries, and the same thing happened.  

Obviously, something was very, very wrong with this picture, but for the life of me, I couldn't figure out what it was. I didn't think my query was all that bad. Most people who read the manuscript liked it. Some people loved it! But the only explanation was that the story, or the writing itself, was the problem. But I love and believe in One so much - SO MUCH - and everyone said the story and writing were fine. I didn't want to give up on it, so I gave it one last chance - The Writer's Voice Contest. If it didn't get picked from slush, and from there attract some sort of agent attention, it was going in the drawer. 

When Cupid picked One out of the gigantic and awesome contest slush pile, I was floored. When Tricia asked to see more pages, I was shocked. I'd heard such incredible things about Tricia. One of my friends had just signed with her (Hi Ann!) and was still fangirling over this agent two weeks later. And she was an agent at EMLA! Do you guys even UNDERSTAND how kick-butt EMLA is? So, I assumed that for some weird reason Tricia was just being nice, and I wrote her off. I expected a sweet form rejection a few weeks later. 

Well, a few weeks later I did hear from Tricia - except, instead of a rejection, she was asking me whether she was too late to read the full. Um....NO. That night, I had actually driven two hours to have dinner with a couple of my CPs, and thank goodness one of them had a level head (Hi Megan!) because she helped me figure out how to send Tricia the full manuscript from my phone in the middle of a loud, crowded bar. The next morning - twelve hours later! - Tricia sent me an email saying she loved the MS, what was I thinking in terms of a sequel, and, oh yeah, we should probably talk on the phone about this. 

Um. So...not a rejection? It turned out that Tricia wasn't joking with me - she really did love my MS, and seemed to know more about the characters and story than I did. She was so excited and passionate about not only One, but possibly Two (!) and all the other ideas and half-finished MSs I have floating around in my netbook that signing with her was a no-brainer. 

So. I still have no idea what was wrong with my querying materials. But after 89 form rejections, I got lucky enough to be fished out of the slushpile by the amazing Cupid, catch the eye of a closed-to-queries agent, and win the freaking representation lottery. I have Cupid, and of course the entirety of the whole goshdarn-aren't-we-amazing online writer's community, to thank. 

Oh! And I got three more form rejections in the last five days. 

Ta-da! Is that not completely inspiring? I love this story! 

Now keep reading...more greatness coming your way from agent-extraordinairre, Tricia Lawrence! Follow her, follow her! Here and here!

C: First things first, what is your sweet of choice?

T: Dark chocolate (dairy-free/vegan) 

C: At what point during a MS can you usually tell you are going to offer?

T: Within the first 50 pages

C: How can you tell?

T: I'm breathless because of a character that has charmed me or scared me or reaches out and grabs me and won't let go.

C: What is the first thing you will do after finishing a MS you are going to offer on?

T: I will go eat dark chocolate, tell all my colleagues at EMLA, and then keep replaying something about the book's character over and over in my mind.

C: Do you ever offer on a MS that you had to take time to decide on first? Or is it typically a fast and easy love?

T: It's a fast love. I usually see my hesitance or lack of obsession with a manuscript and/or character to be an indicator that I'm not the right fit.

C: Do YOU like to do anything to celebrate before/after MAKING "The Call"?

T: Eat dark chocolate. Repeat.

C: Do you have any advice for a writer who just received "The Call"?

T: Breathe. Eat dark chocolate.

C: What kind of things can you forgive in a MS when considering offering? What things must already be in good shape?

T: I can forgive what I think I can help to fix. If I can't figure out how to fix it, that's when the enthusiasm diminishes greatly. 

I would expect to see drafts that a. are not first or second or third drafts, but have obviously been fine-toothed combed over and b. that feel settled into shape (not boring), almost like we could print the darn thing right this minute!

C: If you could only grab three things from the grocery store, what would they be?

T: Dark chocolate (haha!), sea salt Ruffles (my FAVORITE), and fresh raspberries.

C: What made you request the full on ONE?

T: The character of Merrin intrigued me and the premise (future-world small-town Nebraska) intrigued me. I wanted to know what happened next (this is typically why I request all of my fulls).

C: What made you offer on ONE?

T: Merrin did not need to be rescued and I like how Leigh Ann explored that throughout the book, plus the backdrop of the story (future-world small-town Nebraska and what it hides) fits seamlessly into this key element.

C: What is the most common reason you will NOT upgrade a partial to a full?

T: Simply this: I am not intrigued enough, and yet that is SO subjective. What intrigues me can change at any given moment, but usually the character just didn't reach out and grab me for whatever reason. 

C: What is your biggest advice for writers seeking agents?

T: Patience, persistence, and pluckitude (my word for "I get knocked down, but I get up again, you're never going to keep me down" Chumbawamba style).

C: What is your favorite part of being a literary agent?

T: Being part of the creative process and getting inspired by my clients and the stories I read as submissions. By seeing creative patience, persistence, and pluckitude happening right in front of my eyes. It could happen to anybody, seriously. Anyone reading this COULD BE NEXT!

C: Anything specific you are seeking right now?

T: I always say characters, wounded characters. Any size, shape, or genre for zero through 18. ;)

C: Now please tell us something super weird about yourself. :)

I pick up rocks ALL THE TIME. If my hubby finds a cool rock and shows me, I ask if I can have it. I keep them in my pockets, I line them up on my mantel and on my window sills and on my bookcases. I have jars of rocks (and shells). I still will go to a rock beach (they are within easy reach here in Seattle) and try to haul the entire beach home.

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Okay, loving the rock thing and majorly loving the word pluckitude! 

Thank you Leigh Ann and Tricia for sharing your experiences and words with us!!! Priceless!

Now everyone go find some dark chocolate and coffee and keep writing! More fun stuff coming soon!

Thank you!

<3 Cupid