Title: BROTHERLY LOVE
Genre: YA Contemporary Romance
Word Count: 95,000
Query
With a bright music career in her future, and plans
to marry her childhood sweetheart after graduation, life is charmed for
seventeen-year-old Lacy Dalton.
Until Nick Martin happens.
Nick has been in love with Lacy since she first
started dating his little brother Kevin. He’s waited years for an opportunity
to steal Lacy away from Kevin. With graduation and the subsequent wedding only
six months away, he’s running out of time. Tired of waiting on fate to
intervene, Nick takes matters into his own hands and devises a scheme to have
Lacy catch Kevin being unfaithful. He intends to be the hero who swoops in to
mend her broken heart afterwards, but his plan costs Lacy more than just a
fiancé.
That one night of betrayal sets off a devastating
chain of events for Lacy, ending in the accidental death of her mother, and the
mental breakdown of her terminally ill father. After losing everyone she loves,
along with all the dreams she had for her future, only tattered shreds of her
once perfect life remain. Through it all, Nick is there by her side helping
Lacy along her path of restoration and recovery. As new hopes, new dreams, and
a new love arise from the rubble, Lacy forges a new future for herself.
Unfortunately for Nick, if his duplicity is
exposed, destiny may find a way of righting its course.
First 250
Lacy
I gathered up my homework from the floor at the
foot of Kevin’s bed. Not that there was much to gather. We’d spent more time
kissing than studying.
“Just stay for ten more minutes,” he begged, trying
to tug my backpack away to stall me.
“I can’t, Kevin. If I don’t leave now your mom is
going to come up in a few minutes and send me home.”
When I started to stand he pulled me back to the
carpet and pinned me down with another kiss.
“Sneak back out later.”
“You take down bleach-blonde over there and I’ll
think about it,” I bargained, nodding toward the poster of the naked model
taped to the ceiling over his bed.
“That’s not fair. You’ve got dude posters hanging
all over your room.”
“With their clotheson.”
He rolled his eyes. “I’ll take down Sheila when I
don’t need her anymore.”
I grinned and tried to shove him off me. “You’ve
seen me naked, remember?”
“That doesn’t count. We were nine and you didn’t
have boobs yet,” he teased, copping a feel over my blouse.
I maneuvered his hand away by lacing fingers with
his and kissing his knuckles. “Your hormones can wait six more months. After
graduation and the wedding.”
“Test drive?”
“No,” I said, laughing over his tireless
persistence.
“Lacy. Kevin.” Kevin’s mother tapped a warning
knock on the door. Kevin rolled away from me before she cracked it open to look
in on us. “It’s getting late.”
I still can't get over just how wonderful this concept is. Such high stakes! Such drama! GO TEAM! :D
ReplyDeleteI felt I was in the room with them. Great work and good luck!
ReplyDeleteYay! This is great :) The dialogue is so engaging and natural. Good job!
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ReplyDeleteYowza, this sounds intense! I'm dying to know how it all plays out. Go you and go team Cupid!! :)
ReplyDeleteSounds like an emotional roller coaster! Great voice in your opening and awesome query! Love it! Good luck!
ReplyDeleteLOVE this! Great query! Awesome 250! You will rock this!!!
ReplyDeleteThis is definitely a concept that sticks in your head - I keep thinking about your story, wondering how it's all going to turn out, and that's just from the query and first page. Good luck! Would love to read this someday!
ReplyDeleteI really want to read this! How do you get from point A to point B??? Sounds amazing! Good luck!!! :)
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