Tuesday, March 27, 2012

Surprise Agent Invasion #38


Title: MEMENTO MORI
Genre: YA Urban Fantasy
Word Count: 85,000

Query:

Seventeen-year-old Gabriel Durante can manipulate luck, an ability that allows him to not only win thousands of dollars in the lottery but also hook-up with girls at parties. But like all good things, there is a catch to Gabriel's power: he has to work as a demon's personal soul collector, a job that he's held ever since the demon saved him from a premature death at the age of ten.

Always one for partying like there's no tomorrow, Gabriel figures it's worth it...until he finds out that the demon is not only hurting the girl he loves but is also turning him into one of its kind. And so, Gabriel is on a mission to do the one thing he may not be able to do with his luck-manipulating powers: kill his demon master. But time is running out, and so is his humanity. It's a good thing that Gabriel is always up for a little challenge.

MEMENTO MORI will also appeal to fans of the contemporary genre, as it is not only about angels and demons but also about familial and romantic relationships. Its dark humor and action-packed story-line will appeal to fans of Holly Black and Sarah Rees Brennan.

First 250:

On the night that Gabriel Durante harvested his two hundredth soul, he bought himself a drink. There was nothing else he could do, really, other than try to forget the disturbing fact that he’d stolen that many souls…and that he’d kept count.

A flash of purple caught his attention, and he turned to see a girl dancing with her group of friends. Her chin length violet hair glowed in the strobe-lights and  Gabriel could tell from her hair and her flashy silver dress that she was a girl who craved attention.

This, of course, made her the perfect target.

"Hey, you want to dance with me?"

The girl stiffened, not bothering to turn around. Most seventeen-year-old guys would have been discouraged by this. But not Gabriel.  

With a slow smile, he mentally grasped the long wispy strands of his own luck and twisted it towards her. His ability to manipulate luck was the only benefit he’d received when he agreed to serve a demon.

2 comments:

  1. Hello plot, nice to meet you here. I would love to see the first 6 chapters. pam.vhv@gmail

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  2. I like so much about this, that the main character isn't himself a supernatural character but just someone who made 'a deal with the devil' so to speak, and I think you did a great job with the query and the sample page. Your last para is terrific! I'd definitely keep reading after that.

    I'm not going to ask for more just because I already have a reaper series and it's becoming a really crowded shelf. Otherwise, it's sounds amazing. Good luck!

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