Title: 12 STEPS FORWARD
Genre: YA Contemporary
Word Count: 78,000
Query:
After years of giving haircuts and shaves in her
father's barbershop, seventeen-year-old Aubrey is most comfortable hanging out
with guys…until it comes to romance. After admitting to herself that three
years is too long to crush on any one person without making a move, Aubrey
confesses her feelings to Ben, the guy who makes political commentary sound
sexy. When he turns her down, she challenges him to give her one good reason
why. He gives her twelve.
Aubrey has no intention of following a list that
accuses her of being everything from insecure to vain and even judgmental,
unless doing so involves explaining to Ben the difference between being
constructive and being an ass. But as opportunities arise to check things off
the list- like becoming a student assistant for the girl’s the basketball team-
she won't miss out just because it might validate Ben's low opinion of her.
As each check mark and its associated challenges
reveal more to Aubrey about herself, she wonders what Ben is really trying to
tell her with the list. And since suggestion number six pushes her in the
direction of another guy, she needs to figure things out - like now.
First 250:
The quickest, most direct route to a guy’s friendship
is sports. Navigating the route to more ethereal places like his heart requires
a completely different skill set. A skill set I’ve yet to master. According to
my sister Nia, this is my greatest failure.
While I rummage the drawers of my station at my father’s
barbershop, looking for a clipper guard, Nia gives me a pep talk about exactly
how to use my elusive skill set on Ben— the crush of my life— today.
“…Girl, either you need to find out what he wants or
move on.” She garbles into the phone as she brushes her teeth. When she spits
and turns on the faucet, I take my chance to get a word in.
“What if—” I turn away from my station to go
into the break room— even though I have no idea why my clipper guard would be
in the break room— and Ben is standing right behind me wearing his usual khakis
and a short sleeved, button down shirt. “Um, Nia, I have to go. My customer’s
here.”
That’s the easiest way to get her off of the phone.
She knows Dad thinks talking on a cell phone in the presence of a customer is
unprofessional. Thank God for texting.
“Hey. You need something?” I ask him.
He stands there scratching the inside of his collar
with his index finger for a minute before he responds.
“I was going to ask you that. Are you looking for
something?”
This sounds like a fun read. I love the barber shop setting, and you have nice details throughout your 250. The title confused me. I thought this was an alcoholic/recovery story because of the 12 steps reference.
ReplyDeleteMonica #26
Favorite line? "the guy who makes political commentary sound sexy"
ReplyDeleteYour query and first 250 have such great voice!
Carissa #24
I really, really love this query and the first 250 are great as well. I'd so read this, and I usually read women's fiction only, but this is awesome! I love YA contemporaries such as this! Great luck!!!
ReplyDeleteVirginia #9
I love the unique setting and think the 12 reasons is a great device. Your query was clear with great voice and I would love to read more and find out what the 12 are.
ReplyDeleteGood luck!
#31