Sunday, February 12, 2012

Bouncer Post #86

Title: Discovering the Real Millie
Genre: YA Contemporary/Historical
Word Count: 55,000

Query:

All dolled up in her vintage garb, Millie Sinclair attends the most talked-about charity event in Newport High Society - the Roaring Twenties Gala. But when she puts on her great-grandmother’s headpiece and is transported back to 1925, she doesn’t only step into her great grandmother’s t-strap shoes, she steps into the worst night of her life.

Mistaken for her great-grandmother, Millie discovers the conflicting emotions she feels in the present are what her great-grandmother lived in the past. A past she took to the grave. Millie meets her great-grandmother’s secret lover, discovers her soon to be fiancĂ© is a silent partner to one of the top bootleggers in Rhode Island and is bribing a crooked sheriff.

In an attempt to change the past and give her great-grandmother the true love she was denied, Millie runs out on her marriage proposal, badmouths the sheriff and stands up to the KKK.

When Millie returns to the present unable to change the past, she has a choice of her own to make. Should she be with Jimmy, the Harvard accepted, Rolex wearing charmer. Or Shane, a brash, abrasive construction worker with a big mouth and an even bigger heart.

The past was not what she expected, but it might just hold the answers to her future.

First 250:

1925

The blaring jazz music from the grand dining room faded as she ran from the cottage she’d spent every summer at since she was born. The house, while she loved it, had a habit of making her feel as if she were suffocating.

Summers were supposed to be relaxing and fun, but when your parents wanted to pawn you off on one of the most eligible bachelors of Newport’s high society, it was exhausting. Richard Hollingsworth, eldest son to tobacco magnate John Hollingsworth and his socialite wife Helen, was everything her parents wanted for her. But, if Millie had to spend one more second listening to Richard and her father discuss their investments and the stock market, she was going to scream.

Instead of screaming she chose to sneak away. After all, she didn’t want to make a spectacle of herself. As she rounded the gardens, the beaded dress her mother insisted she wear to the dinner party, weighed heavy on its delicate straps. A shock to Millie since her mother was usually against anything ‘flapper like’. Her mother, unlike Millie, still preferred the elegance of the early part of the century.

“Darling it’s Coco Chanel,” her mother had said as she hung it in her dressing room as if it being designer made it okay.

Millie couldn’t deny its beauty. The white beads shimmered in the light of the setting sun and the black beads, strategically placed in an abstract design, appealed to her taste.

26 comments:

  1. I am SO excited to see Millie here. Beautiful writing, great voice and lost of twists that keep you turning pages.. and time travel? how can this not be a winner? GOOD LUCK!

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  2. Bouncer Blue NimbusFebruary 13, 2012 at 8:56 AM

    The query is better than the first 250, but I can see an agent getting excited about this one so "You're in." Good luck!

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    1. THANK YOU!!! I'm so excited I'm clapping to myself :)

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  3. Great concept. Congrats on getting in! :)

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  4. Bouncer Bookish HandygirlFebruary 13, 2012 at 11:32 AM

    I second that! Love it! Definitely in.

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    1. This is Awesome! You are Awesome! Thank you :)

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  5. Congrats girl! This was amazing stuff. Totally intrigued by your story here :)

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    1. Aww thanks! I have a Big Ol' Kool Aid smile now :)

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  6. I really like your query....good luck.

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  7. Loved this query, and the writing! I would definitely pick it up and read it! Nice work, Theresa!! Good luck!!

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    1. Thank you so much!! Hopefully one day you can! Oh that would be awesome :)

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  8. Oh girl!!! Looky you!!!! Three Bouncers are in love! Whoot Whoot!

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    1. Speechless! That's a first! No words just clapping and jumping. Ha!

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  9. Great concept! I'm intrigued to read more. :)

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  10. Bouncer IheartbooksFebruary 13, 2012 at 8:00 PM

    I'm with the others! Your query is very promising, but you might want to consider revising your first 250. Good luck! You're in (again)!

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    1. Thank you! Thank you! The first 250 words I have here is from the prologue. I'm wondering if I should have put the first 250 of the first chapter. Oh well can't change it now but thank you again!

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  11. YAY! Bootleggers!!! I am so loving this concept!

    Good luck with the dates! See you on the other side! :)

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  12. Such a great story idea! Cant wait to see how many agents request it!

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