YA Sci-Fi
Set-up: This
takes place after an excruciating test that left our couple without food or
water for several days. They’ve been estranged, she's broken his heart and
regrets it, he can't get over it. But they can only keep up their forced
distance for so long. Especially since they keep going through brutal tests
that force them to rely on each other.
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“Hey,”
I said. He jerked a little, meeting my eyes.
“Oh,
hey.” The look on his face seared right through me.
“Are
you busy, you want me to leave you alone?” I asked, caught off guard by his
intense stare.
He
paused. “No.”
There
was silence. Then he asked, “You eat enough, get enough water?”
I
stepped a little closer. “Yeah, it’s hard to keep stuff down though.”
He
nodded.
I
came closer. “I wanted to say something to you.”
He
looked away. “Yeah? What is it?”
I
cleared my throat, letting a few seconds pass. “I wanted to… I wanted to say
that I miss you a lot. I feel like, I don’t know. I feel like my life has been
wrong ever since you left.” I pushed back at the nakedness I felt and how it
made me want to run.
He
didn’t answer me. I couldn’t see his eyes, but I could see the tension in his
body. He clenched his hand into a fist and released it.
“I
know I handled things so wrong…” I started.
He
moved so fast I had no time to be alarmed. He grabbed me and tugged me into him
while pushing me back against the Tank. His lips came down hard on mine, then
easier, kissing me like we used to when we first met.
Heaven.
My body let the flood of welcome feelings crowd into my veins, making me feel
more alive than I had in so long. I reached for his face, grabbing the back of
his head with my other hand and pulling him down. I relaxed into the slow
sink to the ground.
But
then suddenly he released me and backed away. His face changed and he
looked at me in a weird way. He was angry. Mixed with something else.
“Hey,
I mean, we…” I stood up straight but he didn’t wait for me to say whatever it
was I was trying to. He turned, and with each of his retreating footsteps the
warm and happy feelings I'd greedily accepted started leaving me. Replaced by
something heavier, colder, and confusing.
I really like this one - it's tense and complicated, that pounding mix of still wanting each other but also still feeling so broken from a rocky past.
ReplyDeleteLove angry intense kissing scenes like this!
ReplyDeleteYou describe the rush of feeling so well. Makes me feel like I can really relate to the characters
ReplyDeleteIntense kissing scenes like this are some of my favorites. Just from this small scene I'd want to read more. Great job!
ReplyDeleteI think the dialogue bits of this scene are particularly nice! They seem to ring very true to my ear when speaking them in my mind-always a tough thing to pull off. Fabulous!
ReplyDeleteLoved this when I first read it, and love still love it!
ReplyDeleteGo, HAVEN!!! Great scene! I'm rooting for ya, buddy!
ReplyDeleteGotta love the angry kiss! :) Great job at getting us into the emotions of these two characters. Awesome!
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