Tuesday, January 24, 2012

Love Triangle Entry #7

Title: Half-Souled

Genre: YA dystopian fantasy

Word count: 85,000


People spend their lives searching for their soulmate, that one perfect person who completes them. It took centuries for mankind to discover the hidden power that resulted from the bonding of such soulmates. Now cities are powered, technology is created and driven, and the government is run using the energy resulting from soulbonds.

Samson Tucker never had a choice about what he would study; his parents started his fight training before he could walk. Now he is following in their footsteps as the best fighter in his school, bound for the Elite Force when he graduates. All he needs is a soulmate, and everyone assumes it will be Alexandra, another of the school's top fighters. But Sam is broken. Only he and one other student, Gretta, can't form even the temporary soulbond used in class. Everyone else knows what it's like to share another's thoughts, to feel the spark of soulpower, to do things no individual alone could ever do.

Until now Sam's skill in fighting has carried him through school, but when Gretta goes insane during an attempted temporary bond, he and the rest of the school are wondering the same thing: is he next? Drawn to the asylum, Sam and Alex must venture beyond the order and security of school to find the secret behind his condition before he shares Gretta's fate.

HALF-SOULED will appeal to readers of Matched by Ally Condie and Divergent by Veronica Roth.

First 250:

I focused on the heavy punching bag in front of me, trying not to see the temporary soulbond being forged in the corner of the gym. Master and Mistress Cawley each placed a hand on the heads of the two students who would be working together today. They linked their free hands together to strengthen their own union, and the bonding began. I couldn’t believe they would form temporary bonds today after everything that had happened.

I spun and kicked. My foot hit the bag with a sound like a firecracker in the too-quiet gym. My timing was off. I stepped away to dodge the back swing, and shook my head and shoulders. I needed to relax. The next few punches snapped against the bag, and my body settled into a routine as familiar to me as breathing.

It didn’t last. The distracting silence in the gym hid the fact that an entire class was working out. Usually the students were joking around, taunting one another about who was going to win the day’s sparring. But today, between the muted sounds of glove against pad and the soft clinking of weights, I could actually hear my classmates breathing.

If I hadn’t already felt in my gut that the rumors about Gretta were true, the subdued activity in the room was enough to convince me that the worst had happened. Right in the middle of an attempted temporary soulbond during first hour, Gretta had flipped out, screaming nonsense and smashing two windows before they got control of her. They said she went insane.


  1. I loved Divergent and Matched and I think I could love this one, too--especially if the rest is as good as your opening.

  2. This is a fantastic beginning and I love the concept behind it, nicely done! Good luck :)

  3. I box so this beginning totally had me hooked!

    Obviously your comparative stories are awesome, very successful books. The only thing I would recommend is to explain WHY they are like your book. Is it the writing style? The protagonists? What about your story is similar?

    Very intriguing story.

  4. Sounds very, very cool :) I'd love to read the FULL!!!

  5. Yay for the full request! I love this.

  6. This sounds really awesome. Congrats on the request! :)

  7. CONGRATULATIONS!!! This is a really great entry! Thanks for participating!

  8. Congrats!! This was one of my faves during the first read-through. I can't wait to see it on a shelf so I can nab it up. Good luck!

  9. Congrats on the full! AMAZING! (I sang that, so you have to too when you read it, lol)


  10. Super cool entry, congrats on the full!!

  11. Thanks everyone for your kind comments, and thanks John for requesting a full!!! I'm so excited!