Title:
TO CATCH A FETCH
Genre: Paranormal Romance
Word Count: 90,000
Query:
Estate photographer Devyn Cartwright doesn't believe
in ghosts—or love at first sight—until the night she stumbles into the arms of
Ronan Evans, a ghost hunter on a mission to find the remaining fragments of a
legendary amulet. Since meeting Ronan, Devyn’s entire world has flipped upside
down, and answers are no longer clear…solutions no longer black and
white. She wants to believe the man she has fallen in love with is sane,
his stories of ghosts and legendary amulets true, but doing so also means she
must accept he is right about her…and his belief she has paranormal abilities
too.
From the moment he meets her, Ronan knows there is
more to Devyn than meets the eye. He senses an aura about her, the kind one
feels when near another person with paranormal abilities. If true, it’s his
responsibility to recruit her for the Society. He decides more observation is
needed, but admits that his decision is not altogether altruistic…after all
it’s hard for him to be objective when other parts of him are, well, hard. When
Ronan’s interest moves far beyond wanting Devyn for her body or her paranormal
talent what follows is the biggest conundrum he has ever faced—how can he
convince her to trust what she feels in her heart when she refuses to believe
what she see with her eyes?
Smart, sexy, and a little spooky, TO CATCH A FETCH is The
Ghost Whisperer meets The Black Dagger Brotherhood and recently
placed first in the paranormal category of the RWA Heart of Denver's 2012 Molly
Contest.
First 250:
Devyn Cartwright stood on the porch steps of the
abandoned Victorian house and inspected her future. Opportunity hadn't knocked,
it had handed her the damn key. Now, as the last fragments of dusk died away,
she clutched the home’s antique key in her hand, its engraved edges scraping
the sensitive skin of her palm.
The heavy oak door opened on silent hinges that
belied their age. Devyn stepped inside and heard the door snick closed behind
her. She reached out to feel for a light switch along the foyer wall. Layers of
thick shadows cloaked the rooms to her right and left, making it difficult to
discern more than the most basic outlines of cloth-draped furnishings.
Lots of cloth-draped furnishings. Her pulse
jumped. Some women went crazy for purses or shoes, but Devyn’s obsession was
houses, specifically nineteenth-century homes and period furniture. The lure of
an abandoned mansion was temptation enough, but the fact it was rumored to be
stuffed to its rafters with authentic pieces made the house too good to resist.
She had taken one look at the vintage key in her boss’s hand and canceled her
last photo shoot of the day.
Maybe I should have asked a few more questions before
hauling ass out here—like did the house have working utilities? Her fingers
brushed against the rounded edges of a modern light switch and she sighed with
relief.
Several futile flicks later she muttered her third
favorite curse word.
I'm going to wait until Thursday to announce my top 3, but I'm going to give everyone some feedback in the meantime.
ReplyDeleteFirst, I LOL'd (in a good way)! Second, the names are kinda unisex. I had a hard time remembering which one was the girl, and which one is the boy. Also, not sure what an "estate photographer" is. Does she photograph the dead person's property? I'd like to know just a tad more about the "Society." It kind of appears out of nowhere, then is gone again.
Okay. Stay tuned!
Thanks for taking the time to comment on all your entires (and thanks- she grumbles) for letting us know you're going to make us sweat it out til Thursday. I lol'd (in a good way too) at the choice of "Colonel Mustard" - nice.
ReplyDeleteI shall stay tuned!
Great first line in the query! Also, love the name Devyn (might just be my MC's name too...)
ReplyDeleteI agree, you could move the society stuff up a bit or give more. And great first 250. Really set the scene.
#156
Awesome: "Opportunity hadn't knocked, it had handed her the damn key." This sets the stage for life shoving her in directions she may or may not understand (or like). Also makes me want to know WHY she opportunity brought her there. Good job!
ReplyDelete#141
You're in!
ReplyDeleteGreat voice. Great humor. What I love about this (both the query and the first 250) is the clever word play. I'm dying to know what her first two favorite curse words are.
Good luck!
SWEET! Thank you Colonel Mustard, for the early Valentine's Day Present. I was popping on to read some other entries and comment when I saw this! Thank you again, I hope you get to see more of the mouthy Ms Devyn soon! ;)
ReplyDeleteBlowing virtual kisses your way!
Congratulations Drama Mama!
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