THE WISHING TREE
YA magical realism
90,000 words
Query:
Growing up in Eldersby, Olivia has
heard all of the local legends about the Wishing Tree. She never believed there
was any truth to them. After a very public humiliation (in front of the best
friend with whom she is secretly in love), Olivia decides to find out.
The next day, a freak accident
befalls her arch-nemesis. The starting quarterback also suddenly takes notice
of Olivia, which makes her best friend jealous. It seems too good to be true.
Olivia makes another wish, and another.
For a small wish, there’s a small
price. A big wish, a big price. The catch is that the wishes don’t cost the
wisher directly.
At first, Olivia doesn’t make the
connection between her wishes and their unintended consequences. When Olivia’s
only competition for the lead in the Summer Fling is struck down by lightning,
she begins to research local history to see if this has happened before.
Only an old woman suffering from
dementia can see the wishing on Olivia. She tells her the Great Fire that
nearly destroyed the town a century ago was started by a man who didn’t get his
wish. The woman warns Olivia not to wish for love. It never comes out right.
As her desperation grows, torn
between the quarterback and her best friend, Olivia uses the Wishing Tree as a
weapon. Too late, she realizes that nothing comes for free. What will it take
for Olivia to decide that the price of her dreams is too high?
First 250:
“Go ask the Wishing Tree.”
I heard a snicker, and I froze. I
knew that voice. It was the same one that had tormented me since the third
grade. Icy sweat collected at the nape of my neck.
April Jensen’s reflection appeared
just over my shoulder. “Ask the Wishing Tree to make you fit into that.”
My eyes darted from the mirror to
the bikini in my hands. Midnight black and dotted with rosebuds, these tiny
pieces of fabric were all that stood between me and the girl I wanted to be.
Someone other than invisible Olivia Linden.
April grabbed my arm, spinning me
around with a jerk. The bikini slipped from my grasp. She stood there
laughing––her plump, pink lips parting to reveal unnaturally white teeth.
Why had April of all people
discovered me working up the courage to try on the bikini? She had never liked
me and I never knew why. Now that she’d graduated from Eldersby High, I was
looking forward to my senior year without her.
She picked the bikini off the
floor, and as she fingered the silky smooth material, my stomach clenched. I’d
been admiring it in the display window covetously all spring, working out
religiously on the cross-trainer, and not eating any white foods. April pinched
her face so that it accentuated the “beauty mark” on her chin––I was sure it
was a wart.
“You ought to be looking at
cover-ups, Olivia. Not bikinis,” she said off-handedly. “Unless there’s too
much of you to cover.”
A cool premise! I like your opening page--very compelling.
ReplyDeleteThis sounds great! I would read on. I think your query needs to be tightened. You don't need to put in so many details to hook the agent.
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Growing up in Eldersby, Olivia has heard all of the local legends about the Wishing Tree, but has never believed them... that is until a freak accident befalls her arch-nemesis and the quarterback (her best friend's love interest) suddenly thinks she's a hot property.
The wishes comes with a price, though. The bigger the wish, the steeper the price. But the wisher doesn't always end up paying.
When Olivia's wish to land the lead in a school play ends in a student's death, she digs into the Wishing Tree's origins and is warned that wishing for love has the highest price of all.
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